Like never, woke up today’s sun
Proudly floating over dust of blue
From butterflies, soil’s perfume flew
Felt I the world safe, but she had to run
Run; seeking a secret hide some place
Deeper than oceans and seas,
Higher than what Human sees
Leaving behind no single trace
Her insecurities are eating her alive
Between smiles and tears stands no border
Everybody’s leaning on her shoulder
To breathe; shall she thrive or strive?
Faith’s leaking out of hands
When, under chains, they’re obliged to sleep
Away, chains of sleepless veins, creep
Till set sail galaxies, but a weak heart, frozen, stands
Staring at the moon plucking off the preciousness of a day
Ripping along everything innocently glittering
There too stood demons of the dark, giggling
It was me not her; gone and gone midway
Eighteen billion seconds give birth to a year
Years painted my rainbow with no touch of green
Recording life’s seasons skipping that of a teen
Where generous rivers were held within each tear…
I’m basically without words. The creativity and deep hitting expression here is amazing.
Beautifully written, to say the least!
Thanks…pleased to know you’re touched..
May your rainbow renew with each breath you take…
I think we all have wrinkled rainbows at times. Than you for expressing it so well.
Thanks for stopping by..
hope yours aren’t deeply carved..
I try to make only the laugh lines deeply carved.
That’s great…may you always succeed through that:)
Wow
&Edward’s Lover is here..thanks for stopping …
May your rainbow see no wrinkles
Nice writing. Love this imagery,” the moon plucking off the preciousness of a day”
Thanks..
Well I’m a night-lover yet for the first time I felt the moon switching off my sun like murderers monstrously pluck off their prey’s eyes:(
I love the layout, and the words…WOW!!!
Thanks; was just enjoying the warmth by your “Fire place”
The painting and photo are magical… Great! By the way, I updated my latest post, here is the new link: http://eof737.wordpress.com/2012/04/18/memories-of-moments-in-bliss/ TY! 🙂
Pleased to know your mind…
amazing poem. it hurts deep inside.
Thanks & I’m really sorry for the hurt:(
i loves the concept and your words and the way you have expressed them is just so amazing!!!
Thanks; nice to know your mind..
Loved the name by the way; gotta check out what’s behind:)
Thanks! ad your always welcome to know anything! 🙂
Your last three lines bring images of children in poverty-stricken and war-torn countries forced to become boy-soldiers, prostitutes and sex-slaves. Your poem says a lot, it hits at social and political, even religious conscience, but yet even a wrinkled rainbow is suggestive of hope. Excellent poem Ms. Mira Jay! –Cynthia Ann
Wow…first I’m glad to see you here
Second I never unveil what was on mind upon writing something, but your analysis gave no choice but say, it was mere personal; watching a life that lacks childhood&teenage; drew nothing but wrinkled rainbow & your right wrinkling isn’t a dead end, it might be a start of wise age..
Thanks for stopping by…have a great weekend
your thoughts wind like a river flowing out to the ocean,
catching waves of emotions the seem to ebb and flow
in your balancing then and was with here and now….
not sure if thats what you were doing but it felt like it to me..
Beautifully scripted with being just you….
Take care….
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ladyblue
Wow…thanks for the perfumed breeze you blew my way…
Your visits are always welcomed; have a peaceful Sunday
Reciting it out loud (somehow) gave your words a meaning of my own. Very moving and deep… Thank you for them… for that…
It’s night where I am, so Goodnight:-).
Thanks for stopping…Can’t say I’m glad for you’ve found yourself through this poem because I know the pain:'(
&yea soon it’ll be midnight here, hope you’re having a tranquil one..
Didn’t see you in a while but you’re always amazing! 😉
Nandita…
welcome back; really missed your shining signature:)
such talent, such sadness
thanks for stopping by…
may your rainbow glitter
thank you 🙂
i’d like to read your beats when you’re not down…
🙂 i have a feeling they’ll be radiant!
Well you can say that I lose my writing powers when I’m not down:(
But I’m trying my best to show that radiant face of mine..
I don’t want just your radiant face
i want you to try writing something when you’re up
I would like to read how your mind thinks then 🙂
O’ Spirits of Nature…that’s sweet,
I’m trying my best but my pencil isn’t working yet at such high-moments…yet I’ll keep trying till it gets bored of its stubbornness.
yes. you should realize the only reason I suggest this
is because you write so well about sadness…
but can you truly say that is all you feel
you yourself said that child within you still lingers…
a child can see a lot of beauty in this world… 🙂
without even being aware of it
you have to look through those eyes…
Thanks for the lift…
I’m Capricorn, so stubborn so I won’t lose the battle with my pencil…
I’m a Virgo…
we don’t give up so easily either 🙂
about the battle… that is where you are trapping yourself…
why are you fighting what is within you?
i think if you just let yourself accept that you can still be happy and writing… you can…
it’s really all in your head. you must ask yourself what use is there in holding onto the sad things… I think it is safe to say… those things are in the past…
so why are you letting that inhibit you now
mira, sorry for interfering so much…
I really want to see how you write more cheerful stuff…
Capri’s are very practical they say.. so be that. 🙂
you got it wrong dear; The battle isn’t with myself ; it’s to accomplish something&I’m on the right track
I don’t enter battles to lose
that makes sense
as long as you know what you’re doing 🙂
by the way how much it takes you to choose your titles? I love the way you sign and seal your titles with star dust
speechless to your description; never met an Engineer with such a mind & I mean no offence..
hugs
fine; I cannot be offended by your sweetness.
blushing again…
Very powerful in its beauty. Enjoyed the tones you create with words in your special way.
Thanks; glad you’ve enjoyed it..
May your rainbow see no wrinkles..
Peace & Light